I am a student at Ōtaki College in Ōtaki, NZ. My blog is a place where I will be able to share some of my learning. Please note....some work won't be edited - they are just my first drafts, so there may be some errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas on my posts.
What an incredible job you have done on your profile page about Markus Persson. I didn’t know he was known as Notch, what a cool nickname. Do you have a nickname?
I really like how you’ve included pictures of the minecraft logo and Mr Persson. They really enhance the experience for your reader. Well done!
I notice you’ve included the same fact about Notch’s age when Minecraft was released twice. Do you perhaps know another fact that you can put on your profile page instead?
Do you play minecraft often? What’s your favourite part of the game?
Thank you for your positive, thoughtful, helpful comments. Positive - something done well Thoughtful - a sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
Kia Ora Niko,
ReplyDeleteWhat an incredible job you have done on your profile page about Markus Persson. I didn’t know he was known as Notch, what a cool nickname. Do you have a nickname?
I really like how you’ve included pictures of the minecraft logo and Mr Persson. They really enhance the experience for your reader. Well done!
I notice you’ve included the same fact about Notch’s age when Minecraft was released twice. Do you perhaps know another fact that you can put on your profile page instead?
Do you play minecraft often? What’s your favourite part of the game?
Hei konā mai,
Shannon